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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the plans of a University’s leisure centre at present and now it will change in the future. Overall, it can be seen that the sports centre will be expanded with more facilities, and there will be no more outdoor facilities. At present, the university sports centre is a rectangular building which has outdoor courts both at its East and West. In the main building, towards the left of the reception, there is a changing
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, and just opposite to it, across the 25m pool, there exists the seating facility. It
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 has a gym towards its North. The
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 noticeable change which is seen in the future plan is the addition of a leisure pool at the West,
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 to the changing
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. Towards the south of the leisure pool, where an outdoor court is situated now, there would be an additional changing
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 and a
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 shop. Opposite to these two, towards the East, another changing
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 is planned with an adjacent cafe. The outdoor court at the East would be transformed to a sports hall and towards its
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 East two dance studios are planned. The
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 visible change
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 is the expansion of the gym towards the East.
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