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at present,the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults when compared with the number of older people. do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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There have been ongoing debates regarding whether or not the population of
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 generation should outnumber that of the elderly citizens.
This
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would be more beneficial and detrimental.
To begin
 with, there are various benefits associated with the major figures of adolescents. The
first
 advantage is that youngsters growing up in the digital-transforming world tend to have a better understanding and knowledge of technological advancements when compared to elder people.
Therefore
, when companies employed their workforce, they are able to reduce their cost in terms of technology-related training. Another optimistic outcome from
younger
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 generation is that they are more productive at their workplace. Most people at
young
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a young
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 age are full of energy, enthusiasm, fresh and innovative ideas and a good condition of health. Take one of my
friend
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;
for example
, she succeeded in her overload of works with
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compliment
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in addition
 to her part-time NFT artist.
On the other hand
, opponents of
this
 might argue that the excessive number of young adults is expected to generate
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 high volume of unemployment in the future as they are inexperienced and they are more like to be fallible/tend to make mistakes at
workplace
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the workplace
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.
For instance
, it can be apparently seen that in today’s world, numerous firms are extremely strict on recruiting new employees and seeking
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those who have years of
experiences
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experience
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. In conclusion,
although
 it is undeniable that some people are concerned
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that the majority of
younger
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 generation might result in the increasing rate of unemployment, I am of the opinion that its potential advantage
outweigh
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 its detrimental consequences.
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