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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Living closed to the
hometown
 is a popular option for most
people
 rather than moving away to live in a new place and
this
 essay I shall elaborate some benefits and disadvantages for being stayed in
hometown
 with some relevant reasons. On the one hand, living near to the home town makes
people
also
 close to their family and relatives.
This
 trend is closely related to the social culture or religious beliefs that children should take care of their parents after being an adult.
Moreover
, a lack of information about opportunities to succeed if they decided to move away from home town makes most of them are afraid to take a risk for going away from their
hometown
.
Also
, another reason is that they already have a stable financial situation or have some assets that are needed to be managed. Another reason is a lack of adaptation skills
also
 become one consideration.
Hence
, staying the rest of life in their birthplace is the only option for those
people
.
On the other hand
, living in a new place could bring big opportunities for some
people
 to develop.
People
 who have just moved to a new city tend to be more strong in solving problems and
consequently
 they would be more successful in both finance and career. According to my personal experience, many
people
 today whom I know would never become crazy rich or a billionaire unless they go away from home tome to look for changes for business opportunities or a better carrier.
However
, all that has been mentioned are the benefit that
people
 throw away for being stayed near to their relatives. To summarise, only a few
people
 choose to live far away from the city where they were born. Stay living in a
hometown
 are still a popular decision for most individuals due to the significant benefits that they could be experienced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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