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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society . others, however , belive that school is the place to learn this.

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In
this
 day ,some people think that
parents
 should teach
child
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a child
the child
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 how to be good members of
society
 other,
however
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 believe that
school
 learn
this
 . overall ,it is important to teach students and age young generation is the base of any nation as an effect.
Firstly
 ,
in
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 the age of high it students need to build their self confidences and experience by doing unpaid duty by having
it
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confidence they do not have to rely on people.it teacher should start programs and workshops in the
school
 techingthem research shown that many schools started programs and unpaid internships give the students for their respective professional field.by doing it can have more exposure to their related fields of work.
Secondly
 ,
parents
 want to teach their
children
.but
parents
 go to work so they do not have time so they can not give the
children
 too much time .but
parents
 teach the
children
 to be a good member of the
society
 in as much time as possible. for
parents
 give the
children
 an activity that allows them to participate in all the activities of the
society
 as well as provide knowledge.
However
,
my
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 think the
children
 should through a
school
 teacher because more activity in
school
 has created knowledge in the
children
 to become a good man and
children
 can be
good
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a good
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man
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men
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 in
society
.
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