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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society . others, however , belive that school is the place to learn this.

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 should teach
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 how to be good members of
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 other,
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however
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 believe that
school
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 learn
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 . overall ,it is important to teach students and age young generation is the base of any nation as an effect.
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 the age of high it students need to build their self confidences and experience by doing unpaid duty by having
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confidence they do not have to rely on people.it teacher should start programs and workshops in the
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 techingthem research shown that many schools started programs and unpaid internships give the students for their respective professional field.by doing it can have more exposure to their related fields of work.
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parents
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 want to teach their
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.but
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 go to work so they do not have time so they can not give the
children
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 too much time .but
parents
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 teach the
children
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 to be a good member of the
society
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 in as much time as possible. for
parents
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 give the
children
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 an activity that allows them to participate in all the activities of the
society
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 as well as provide knowledge.
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 think the
children
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 should through a
school
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 teacher because more activity in
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 has created knowledge in the
children
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 to become a good man and
children
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 can be
good
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man
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