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In many workplaces, online Communication is getting more common than meeting face to face. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Owing to increasing advanced technology and internet facilities, online communication plays an indispensable role in everyone's life some segments of society prefer to do conversation
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online;
however
, counterparts of the society insist
face-to-face
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 meetings.
This
 essay will not only highlight the benefits which are associated with
this
 situation but
also
 present some drawbacks of
this
 phenomenon. As per my
persepectives
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perspective
perspectives
, the drawbacks certainly seem to be little as Compiled to the benefits. There are two prime advantages that can be considered to
this
 situation. One of the best advantages is that we can save time by doing
multitask
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 activities and there is
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more chance to connect people all around the world at any time as it was rare
in
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a decade ago.
For example
, various studies conducted in the USA confirmed that with the help of computer
network
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networks
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, seventy per cent
local
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business
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businesses
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 tuned into an international level.
Moreover
, it is helping our environment in an indirect way. To simplify, we do not require to commute from one place to another place and
that is
 not only helping to reduce traffic problems but
also
 we can save our precious fossil fuel.
For instance
, An article published in ‘The Times'-stated that during the recent time of
Covid
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 pandemic, most IT employees had arranged their meetings virtually and,
as a result
, fifty per cent of fuel consumption has decreased in the
last
 two years. Every rose has some thorns,
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 there are some detects in
this
 situation.
Firstly
, some people especially elder workers may not find
comfortable
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it comfortable
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to do
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 online chattings as they
does
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 not aware of
this
 novel technology so they
prefer
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 do to
one-on-one
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conversation
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conversations
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.
Secondly
, without mutual meetings will always lead to a deficiency of trust
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 other and
relation
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relations
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 will be
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a
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machine-based which is more
difficulty
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 to run a business in
the
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critical circumstances. In conclusion,
although
 there are Pros and Cons related to
online
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 mode of transmission, there are more Positive impacts
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 create
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 facilities to society.
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