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the alteration in spending habits of people in the UK between 1975 and 2000.

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The given pie charts illustrate the alteration in spending habits of
people
 in the UK between 1975 and 2000. Overall, it can be seen that there was a significant change in
people
's habits. The noticeable changes can be seen in the addition of other kinds of habits twenty years later. Looking at the
first
 main feature, there was 36% of the petrol spending in 1975, but
this
 figure dropped dramatically to only 8% in 2000.
Similarly
. While there was 25% of
people
 spent on the furniture in 1975, approximately four times as fewer
people
 spent after 25 years.
Likewise
, the number of spending on restaurants fell steadily from 25% in 1975 to only 14% in 2000.
On the other hand
, the proportion of computer expenditure rose slightly from 7% in 1975 to 12% in 2000.
Moreover
,in 2000,
people
 spent the most on cars, with about 43%, and there was the proportion of expenditure on foods and books around 14% and only 1%.
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