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the number of research students studying six various subjects in 2015.

The given bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of research
students
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 studying six various subjects in 2015. Overall,it is clear that there was the same
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 of boys and girls studying in natural sciences and more the men
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 course in all subjects than the women student except the linguistics. According to the chart,The majority amount of men studies psychology,natural sciences and mathematics,with about 200
people
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.
This
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number
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 was the same level of the women who study in natural sciences,which was the subject that has the highest amount of women’s study.
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, the corresponding figure for women's courses in psychology and mathematics were approximately 180
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 and only 48
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 respectively.
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,while there were 150
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 of men
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 studying engineering and programming, the
number
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 of girls studying those subjects was almost 100
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 and around 70
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.
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, around over 100
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 of the girl
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 course linguistics,higher than that of the boys,with only around 90
persons
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.

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