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Some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behaviour while others say the amount of time children spend watching TV influences their behavious. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the modern world of today, kids watching
television
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 is a more than normal thing to do. Yet, watching
television
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 can have effects on your
children
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 whether is the programs or the amount of hours they watch. In
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 essay, I will depict my thoughts and give opinions on both statements.
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 of all, there are a plethora of programs on
television
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, but not all of them are suitable for
children
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. And because of
parents
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' lack of carefulness,
children
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 will accidentally watch shows that are inappropriate for them.
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 will cause the kid to misjudge the information from the shows, thinking it is forgiven to perform
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.
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, when a
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 show is broadcasting violent content,
children
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 who saw it will misjudge content when there is no adult supervision, and think that action is allowed.
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,
this
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 could influence ones' child's behaviour.
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, the amount of
time
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 letting
children
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 watch
TV
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 will
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 be an inappropriate action for the
parents
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. When
children
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 are getting noisy or impatient,
parents
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 tend to use
TV
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 as a distraction. But adults almost always forget
time
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, and accidentally let their kids watch too long of
television
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.
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 poor responsibility will result in
children
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 being lack in paying attention to everything. There is a scientific analysis report supporting the statement above. The analytical report has defined, when kids are watching a long period of
television
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, it will affect their behaviour. In conclusion, the behaviour of the
children
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 will be affected by both type and duration of
time
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 of watching
television
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.
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parents
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 should take responsibility for the selection of
TV
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 programs and
TV
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 watching
time
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 management.
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