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In the past, people used to travel to see the differences from their home country. However, the sceneries in places around the world seem similar nowadays. What are the causes of these similarities? Do you think that the advantages of these similarities outweigh the disadvantages?

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torism
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tourism
people
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different things rather than their own place.
However
, these days everything looks the same in the whole world.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons behind these similarities and
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 trend
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 some drawbacks which are outweighed
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 its positive aspects.
To begin
 with, there are several factors which bring similar things in all the
countries
.
First,
the development of modern technology leads to
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all
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. Even the world of the internet is so gigantic, that it connects a lot of professionals who can exchange their viewpoints with each other and all
this
 happened
due to
 modernization.
Secondly
, the most popular way for many
countries
 became an international work style.
Thus
, filled with multinational workers,
countries
 acquire the cultural characteristics, architecture, cuisine and clothes styles of those
countries
 from
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 they arrived. Which in turn confronts us with the loss of the uniqueness of any country and culture.
Moreover
, the main disadvantages of the similarity are the lack of
people
's interest and economic growth. If the will be the same
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cuisine
, constructions and fashion styles,
then
people
 certainly lose their interest
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 these places and
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economic growth will be effective immensely. Because these days tourism is a booming industry that boosts the economy of the territory, the idea of similarity will lead toward negative implications.
For instance
, there have been some recorded instances of
people
 who only choose unique places to travel to
instead
 of similar ones.
Thus
, the demerits are higher which could not be ignored.
To conclude
, it is true that there are no big differences among the nations around the world in terms of scenic beauty these days.
This
 essay discussed the pivotal reasons for the change and
also
 its enormous disadvantages.
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task response
Improve your task response by fully addressing all parts of the question. Provide a more balanced view of the advantages and disadvantages of the trend of similarities in global tourism.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Homogenization
  • Architectural uniformity
  • Cultural exchange
  • International brands
  • Tourism industry
  • Urban design
  • Economic development
  • Proliferation of media
  • Cultural norms
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