The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

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globally came
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way by the advancement and still continuing. one of the major noticeable
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in
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is
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business, It is argued that due to
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online shopping there might be a huge downfall in future on the vendors who are maintaining physical
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. Well, according to me there might be a slight impact but
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conventional shopping stays still even how advanced
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e-commerce may become in future. It is debatable yet; I stand with my opinion and pretty good reasons to support it. The growth of online shopping is a positive sign
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how easily accessible
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things
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can be for
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.
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we can not only get the clothes or
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but
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the daily essentials for household from basic to the most important needs. Either packaged items or fresh vegetables and fruits
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will be delivered to our
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within
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minimum time possible. It is a positive thing for many
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who can’t make time for
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due to their hectic daily schedules and their work which requires their major time. Online shopping is
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elderly
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who can’t go out and get
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.
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, consider elderly parents who live by themselves won’t have enough energy or strength and many
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factors as sight problems due to ageing can’t simply go out daily and buy required
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without someone accompanying them,
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can be avoided by making them aware and train about the various methods of online shopping and how to use them.
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argue that
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might lead to
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the conventional
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in future. I say it is a hoax
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because
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became more health conscious
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they go for walks in which they cover their daily groceries and will always prefer fresh and quality foods rather than ordering them
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online.
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love to go out on their weekends some might travel but most of them do shopping conventionally go for
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departmental
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or supermarkets to buy the groceries which will
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mostly to keep them fresh. Most of the
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go buy clothes only after seeing the quality by themselves, with
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major amount of
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preferring to the conventional shopping there will be no
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thing as closing out of business due to online shopping.
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, Most
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surf on the internet for products and go for
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conventional shopping requesting similar
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or similar prices just to make sure that they get worthy and quality
product
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products
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which will be inconclusive through online shopping until u pay and get the product and
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is the huge advantage of the conventional shopping. In
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I would say I strongly disagree
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people
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going out of business due to online shopping because even
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online shopping most of the products will be dispatched from the conventional
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register them as a vendor in the respective e-commerce companies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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