The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given are two maps comparing the centre of Islip at present and in the future. Some new buildings are expected in the future. As the first map reveals, the Islip town centre now is relatively small. There is a main road from the west to the east with shops on both sides. The northern
area
is rarely countryside,
while
the southern
area
is filled with houses with a school
at the end
of the fork road in the southwest corner and a park in the southeast. In the future, the main road is expected to reform into a dual carriageway as a round containing all the new buildings. The horizontal pedestrian is probably cutting the circle into two semi-circles in the north and south. Bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing are exposed to be built in a line, replacing the previous northern shops from west to east in the northern
area
. On the other side, to the south of the previous shops, the housing
area
is expected to expand with new houses built,
while
the former park may suffer
reduction
Correct article usage
a reduction
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. Interestingly, the school and houses out of the carriageway in the south may hardly albeit a great development. 推荐文章:
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