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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

#illiteracy #concern #countries #world #effects #people #society
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countries still have a problem of not
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 educated in the population. There seem to be two main causes and two effects, which we will discuss here. Possibly the main
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 basic
education
 might be unemployment and being poor.
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country
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percent
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 of illiteracy of folks
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 have low income. Most of them
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 enough cash to get
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 supplies and
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 proper
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for
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 children.
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another common belief that parents probably had
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attitude
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 towards
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education
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In other
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 they taught their kids that they don’t need the
education
 at all. All they need may be hardworking
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farm
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 or living countryside as
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. So they intentionally choose
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 their children future going to become not educated
person
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.
Firstly
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 going to show some bad consequences
such
 as might increase
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being jobless and committed high number of
crime
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. It is
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 held view that
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committed
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crimes
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 not good background and basic knowledge which means they don’t have
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 crimes. Maybe the
people
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develop
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 system
to
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people
 who
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 lower
income
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.
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 widely-observed impact is some
people
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person who
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 fundamental
education
 so they going to keep them
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low
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 profile in society. Especially during
this
 era everything
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 to social media and
smart phones
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.
Overall
, salary and attitude seem to be
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 causes, and they
effect
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commit
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crime
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 and individuals of
people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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