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The responsibility of bringing up children should be equally shared by mother and father .to what extent do you agree or disagree

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In
this
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 present-day world,it has to be said that both father and mother have equal responsibility in their scion's upbringing;gender equality is accepted by society for
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 development of our lives.In bygone days, women were restricted in some areas
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 as in education, work and independence, whereas today females are equally important in all fields.So it is not sceptical about the responsibility of the heir as
parents
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; both ought to be equally shared.I agree with
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 notion and
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 essay will enunciate the agreement in detail with appropriate instances. To commence with, it is indeed an irrefutable fact that
children
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 have to be taken care of by their
parents
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 without gender difference.
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, these days both
parents
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 have jobs and good salaries so they have to seek ways to protect
children
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 with the help baby sitter or home nurse in their home during work hours.
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, during their milestones
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 should support offspring for
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 change; because they are not mature enough to make decisions on their own and they have no life experience.
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 , a seminal study was conducted by scholars of Harvard University about the importance of parental support during the
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 phase of speaking.The result shows about 70% of support is needed during speaking to understand the language and pace.
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 ,other milestones
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 need parental succour. To continue, it is paramount to teach offspring about the importance of oratory skills and polite behaviour.
Parents
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 have a great role in
children
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's development.To cite an example, a study was conducted by NIMHANS Institute, Bangalore about parental influence in
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's social life.The result shows about 50% of influence from
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, 35% from teachers and 15% from peer groups.In the light of
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 study, psychologists have decided to counsel
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 about
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. In conclusion,
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 difficult to help
children
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 as a busy parent without any difference in gender, there should be a positive result on another side, and it is proven that
parents
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 have the responsibility in the upbringing of their kids than others.
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