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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Undeniably, in today's modern world, most people prefer to be self-employed
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 of working for other companies or bosses. In fact, in my point of view, there are more disadvantages.
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 with, people choose to work for themselves because of many reasons
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 as income aspects and
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 satisfaction. Most of them think they can easily learn money by themselves like other companies while being independent and self-employed can put them in huge financial
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 which can cause debt and other
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. When you are your own boss, there is no monthly income so you need to work hard as much as an organization.
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, there is no financial support so you need to use bank loans or other supportive programs to improve your
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.
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, another disadvantage of being selfie-employed is about
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 safety. Whenever you are working for a company, you have lots of important insurance that build you the trust that when something happens to you or after your retire you have more your monthly payments to afford your needs and life expectancy. While if you are self-employed there is no retirement insurance or other
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 safety. In summary, lots of people in today's modern world want to be independent and earn money for themselves because of some financial goals and employment
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 which truly face them to tackle with so many
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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