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Some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environments should no longer exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #zoos #animals #environments #st #century
Zoos
 showcased
animals
 to
general
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 public including children mainly for
the
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entertainment purpose.
However
, 21st century is the century of advanced
technolgy
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technology
 where
zoos
has
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 negligible importance in society,
therefore
i
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 support the notion that
zoos
 are no longer needed in the present world.
Few
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 decades ago,people used to visit
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the zoo
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zoo
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zoos
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 because they wanted to see wild
animals
 which could only be seen in the woods. There were no
such
 channels like national geographic on which they could learn and watch about those
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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. But now,there are numerous channels on which documentaries on wild
animals
 and
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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 can be seen with
lot
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 of information about their living and habitats.One can
also
 watch forest creatures on
internet
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the internet
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 by just searching them on
google
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the google
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 search
engine
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engines
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.
Furthermore
,
animals
 who live in
zoos
 are like prisoners rather than free
animals
. They cannot hunt , live and reproduce , all these activities are controlled by
zoos
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 authorities.
Therefore
animals
 we see in
zoos
 are not behaving as they would behave in their natural homes ,
hence
 it affects the natural growth of the
animals
 which is not good for them as well as for the environment.
Moreover
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 the money government has invested in
zoos
 can be invested in making
environment
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the environment
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 better by making national parks and large spaces where these
animals
 can live their lives naturally. In conclusion,
on
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 could support the
existance
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existence
 of
man made
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man-made
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zoos
 in the past but now their presence is irrelevant.
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