Some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environments should no longer exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

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Zoos

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showcased

animals

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general

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public including children mainly for

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entertainment purpose.

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, 21st century is the century of advanced

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technology

where

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has

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negligible importance in society,

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support the notion that

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are no longer needed in the present world.

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decades ago,people used to visit

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the zoo

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zoo

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because they wanted to see wild

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which could only be seen in the woods. There were no

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channels like national geographic on which they could learn and watch about those

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wild life

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. But now,there are numerous channels on which documentaries on wild

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wild life

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can be seen with

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of information about their living and habitats.One can

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watch forest creatures on

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by just searching them on

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animals

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who live in

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are like prisoners rather than free

animals

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. They cannot hunt , live and reproduce , all these activities are controlled by

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zoos

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authorities.

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animals

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we see in

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are not behaving as they would behave in their natural homes ,

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it affects the natural growth of the

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which is not good for them as well as for the environment.

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the money government has invested in

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can be invested in making

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the environment

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better by making national parks and large spaces where these

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can live their lives naturally. In conclusion,

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could support the

existance

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existence

man made

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zoos

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in the past but now their presence is irrelevant.

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

243 words

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Some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environments should no longer exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a 'gap year', before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others, this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.