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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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Over the
last
 few years, the
amount
 of wasted
food
have
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 increased rapidly with
millions
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 tons of which are wasted daily. There are many reasons causing
this
 and solutions for the issue
involve
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 the government, businesses and individuals There are many factors contributing to the waste of
food
.
First
, many fresh products in supermarkets are not sold fast enough. Fruits and fresh meat is in
this
 category,which can be
spoilled
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spoiled
spilt
 easily in a short time despite being preserved
a
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cool temperature.
Moreover
, many outdoor markets don’t have good
equipements
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equipment
 to keep
these
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food
 cool under hot weather.
Furthermore
,
restaurants
 and their customers are
also
 responsible for
large
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amount
 of
food
 being wasted. Many people order
food
 as they
favor
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 without finishing them before leaving, while
restaurants
 might not reuse or recycle wasted
food
. There are many solutions that can reduce
this
. Businesses like supermarkets should
sale
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 fruits and freshly cooked
food
 in a day by reducing the price.
Moreover
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 they should have constant promotions. for
this
 category. Regarding
restaurants
, they may
fine
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find
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 customers with
small
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a small
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amount
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amounts
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 of money and donate
it
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them
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 to charity, as the result
this
 will change
the
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apply
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their eating habits and raise
people
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people's
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 awareness. The governments should budget factories to improve their process in
food
 preservation and encourage businesses to produce
long-lasting
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a long-lasting
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product
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products
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such
 as can
food
. In conclusion,
large
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a large
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amount
 of
food
 being wasted is caused mainly by
restaurants
 and
supermakets
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supermarkets
, and the issue can be
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ease
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eased
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 by taking action in raising public awareness and reducing the price.
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