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Task 2 Academic: Some people say that smart phones have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that smart phones have made life more complex and stressful.

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Nowadays, with the development of high technologies, electronic devices become close to people and
smartphone
 is one of them. With a
smartphone
, you can do anything. Because of its compact design, you can easily carry it with you. And in the age of evolving media,
smartphone
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the smartphone
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 is an intermediary bridge to help you access
those website
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that website
those websites
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, connect and communicate with
the
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apply
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others, update information, remind
we
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us
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the
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of the
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 schedule,
....
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 It is the product of high technology, so it can be said that it
have
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 made life easier and more convenient. But everything has two sides, smartphones are
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no
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not
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no
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exception
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an exception
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.
Rely
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 too much on
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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 can make life more complex and stressful.
Because of the
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 continuous use of the phone for a long time will give you headaches and eyestrain. If you do not have a
smartphone
, you will feel uncomfortable and passive in
solve
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solving
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 the problem by yourself.
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