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In many countries the age of criminals is getting lower. Give reasons and solutions to the problem. Support your position with relevant examples.

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Many nations reported crimes by teenagers. In the forthcoming paragraph, I shall explain the cause and solution with a suitable example. Many
parents
 have work commitments, so they do not give proper
time
 to their
children
.
Parents
 are chasing to balance their life but they could not manage it.
As a result
, offspring went in different directions. Due to a lack of guidance and negligence by their
parents
,
children
 are involved in unethical
activities
. Unknowingly,
children
 are part of the crime.
However
,
parents
 do not teach morally and ethically to do
such
activities
 which may lose their dignity.
For example
, some pupils were found taking drugs on the street where police caught them red-handed out the school premises.
Additionally
, to come into the spotlight,
children
 show off their expensive gadgets in the public. Others do not have enough money to maintain
such
 status among them; they started planning to get it in the wrong way.
For Instance
, one of my neighbours registered a complaint in the police station in the case of money theft by a student. To overcome
this
 problem, people should give leisure
time
 to their
children
. Off work,
parents
 keep an eye on their
children
's daily
activities
. Communicate with teachers and principals and ask for academic performance.
Moreover
, take vacations and plan a trip with their
children
 to spend quality
time
 with their
children
.
Also
,
parents
 should encourage their
children
 to participate in other
activities
such
 as sports, music and dance. To conclude,
,
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parents
 give more importance to their work as well as their
children
, to prevent crime,
parents
 play a key role. To distract from crime,
parents
 take a step ahead to spend valuable
time
.
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