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In many countries the age of criminals is getting lower. Give reasons and solutions to the problem. Support your position with relevant examples.

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Many nations reported crimes by teenagers. In the forthcoming paragraph, I shall explain the cause and solution with a suitable example. Many
parents
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 have work commitments, so they do not give proper
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 to their
children
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.
Parents
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 are chasing to balance their life but they could not manage it.
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, offspring went in different directions. Due to a lack of guidance and negligence by their
parents
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,
children
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 are involved in unethical
activities
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. Unknowingly,
children
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 are part of the crime.
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,
parents
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 do not teach morally and ethically to do
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activities
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 which may lose their dignity.
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, some pupils were found taking drugs on the street where police caught them red-handed out the school premises.
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, to come into the spotlight,
children
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 show off their expensive gadgets in the public. Others do not have enough money to maintain
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 status among them; they started planning to get it in the wrong way.
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, one of my neighbours registered a complaint in the police station in the case of money theft by a student. To overcome
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 problem, people should give leisure
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 to their
children
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. Off work,
parents
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 keep an eye on their
children
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's daily
activities
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. Communicate with teachers and principals and ask for academic performance.
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, take vacations and plan a trip with their
children
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 to spend quality
time
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 with their
children
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.
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,
parents
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 should encourage their
children
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 to participate in other
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 as sports, music and dance. To conclude,
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parents
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 give more importance to their work as well as their
children
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, to prevent crime,
parents
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 play a key role. To distract from crime,
parents
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 take a step ahead to spend valuable
time
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juvenile delinquency
  • influence
  • parental supervision
  • social inequality
  • propel
  • comprehensive strategies
  • family values
  • moral and social values
  • government policies
  • disparities
  • regulating
  • depiction
  • at-risk youth
  • mentors
  • inclusive education systems
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