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some people believe that Internet users should be able to express any kind of opinion online. Other people feel that governments or the companies that own websites should put limits on what people can say online. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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There are many
people
use
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who use
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 the
internet
 for daily life nowadays. The
internet
 can allow
people
 to express any kind of opinion unlimited.
In contrast
, some
people
 feel that should be limited
internet
 users’
expression
 on the
internet
 by governments or the companies that own websites. In the following paragraphs, both views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. Restriction of
freedom
 while using the
internet
 limit
of
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personal privacy,
that
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which
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 is unacceptable in modern society because the
internet
 is the
freedom
 platform that
people
 can share
expression
 and
opinion
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opinions
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. Everyone has
freedom
 on that platform to speak for themselves as long as they want. Due to the rise of technology,
although
 the information is spread widely and out of
controlling
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control
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, they may get some fake news or negative
expression
 that make someone get hurt. That
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is why
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why
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way
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,
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apply
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 some
people
 would like governments or the companies that own websites
restrict
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to restrict
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 what users say online.
Additionally
, there are some countries and corporations
are
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that are
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 trying to limit rules on the
internet
 platform
such
 as China, they do not want the
people
 to get in touch with
freedom
 will on the
internet
 world,
that
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which
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 could cause revolution and cause them to lose power. In conclusion,
people
 from different parts of the world should
be respect
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respect
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 each other for using the
internet
 to decline the negative
expression
 that
make
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makes
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 trouble to some
people
. The
internet
 is still beneficial in terms of communication and finding information, and the future is about focusing on the present and developing new values based on the examples that were given to us
bring
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to bring
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the
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a
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 better future for
the
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apply
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humanity. Governments or the companies that own websites should put limits on what
people
 can say online is not the good way to decline the problem.
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