Today more and more full-time university students focus on other activities rather thein spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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University

is a place where “Pebbles are polished and diamonds are dimmed” itself signifies the importance of

university

education. It is believed by some that participating in other

activities

Plays an important role for

university

students

Although

there are agreements on both sides, due to my own beliefs I agree that

students

can

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experiences by taking part in certain exercises. Even these beliefs will be discussed in support of my personal stance in the following Paragraphs. To embark on, there is no doubt for some people who prefer to pay more attention

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studying.

Firstly

, they believe that nowadays

university

Curriculum is lengthy and is more difficult to accomplish within a year. If they pay more focus on

then

they could pass

examination

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with high rank and get

opportunity

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get a job offer from a reputed organisation which is extremely crucial in

this

competitive era.

For example

, various studies Conducted in the USA

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Conformed

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that seventy per cent of

students

get their desired job after Graduation from

the

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apply

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colleges

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Thus

academic

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syllabus is

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indispensable to

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bright

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career. why extracurricular

activities

are essential for

university

students

? the underlying reason behind

this

is that Certain

activities

might help youngsters to connect

Society

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and build connections with Society and s make them responsible.

For instance

, an Article Published in 'The Times’-stated that by taking part in charity work, young People could have chances to help and meet people who are in

difficult

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situation

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Therefore

, it

is not only help

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to nurture their kindness but

also

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would help to motivate

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becoming decent citizens in the future and that could help result in a decrease

crime

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rates. To

further

corroborate

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the above view, Harvard

University

revealed that every

Students

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has to attend at least three social

activities

before graduating in order to improve domestic labour forces. In conclusion,

although

there are several benefits to

give

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more time to the studies for

better

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future, I would say that being bookish may lead

many

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health problems.

That is

why I opine that it is important to generate interest to learn non-study

activities

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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350 words

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