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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, parents are paying more attention to
children
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's education and even some people hold the view that
children
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's leisure
activities
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 must be educational. One of the obvious examples is that
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 after class will be sent to various clubs, ranging from painting to music. Parents think that it is a good way to help their
children
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 make full use of
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 and their
children
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 will have more opportunities to learn more skills.
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, if a child takes an art club, he may be better at drawing or painting and appreciating fine arts than his peers. At the same
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, it is much easier for him to make some like-minded friends and develop his social and communication skills, which may be difficult to be fostered for a child who is just left alone at home. In spite of these benefits, I do not agree that
children
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's leisure
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 must be associated with education and seemingly doing nothing is a waste of
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. From my perspective, like adults, they should
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 need some
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 to absorb the knowledge and skills that they have acquired at school and to relax their minds and bodies. Only by
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 method, can they get recharged and embrace a new day energetically and confidently, or they are likely to experience tiredness and sleepiness.
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, we should not deny that free
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 in leisure
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 benefit
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 a lot.
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, running and chasing with fellows is beneficial to body health and fitness; doing graffiti sometimes can stimulate their creativity. In conclusion, I think entertainment
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 are not necessary to be educational because
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 need some
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 to relax. And pure free
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 have important and positive effects on
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: building up strong bodies and cultivating creativity.
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