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Some educationalists say a child should be taught to play a musical instrument. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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At present, one of the main topics in the education system is to attract childrens' attention not only to study
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 to art.‌‌ In my opinion,
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 really should be able to play musical instruments. Because music helps them develop their intelligence, be calm, and
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 develops their creative thinking.
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, my nephew has been taking piano lessons since childhood, and I noticed that he differs from his teenagers in his mind and character.‌‌
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, I think that the decision should be left to the
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, if they do not want to do art,
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 it is better to help them find another hobby. Because many
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 are more interested in doing exact subjects than art.
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, learning to play musical instruments requires them a lot of time, effort and patience, which are difficult to master.
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, many
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 often do not follow through and stop playing instruments after a certain time.‌‌ In conclusion, I think that
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 should be able to play at least one musical instrument. Because, in my opinion, it helps them to love the world, to be smart, calm, and
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 polite.‌‌
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