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Nowadays there is a debate if the teenagers who commit crimes should be judge such adults. In my opinion, young people should be punished under the specific laws made to them.

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Currently
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 in the most developed societies, there are specific
laws
 to protect
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children and teenagers but
also
 these
laws
 not only protect them
also
 they regulated their criminal acts like burglary or possession of drugs ,
For instance
, in ,Spain we have “Ley del menor” . If some young commit a crime, the punishment will be adapted to their circumstances and more importantly, to his/her age.
Besides
, there are juvenile centres to support the law, in which youngers could serve an adapted sentence until they are 18.
Nevertheless
, not all youngers received the same punishment, others should do community services
such
 as
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 care of elderly
people
, or
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 with
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local charities. Keeping them in the community helping others not only learn new skills but
also
 could develop empathy and care towards others. Definitely, the final purpose of these
laws
 and centres is
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 the youngster part of the population. We all know that the system failed in jails, somehow most of the prisoners will never be re-educated and the major part of them develop criminal behaviours,
therefore
 the initial sentence became a never-ending sentence inside the jail. There is a
further
 reason not to put the
people
 in jail is the possibility to mix them with more dangerous
people
 and criminals potentially committed a worse crime. For that reason, I am in total disagreement with the fact that young
people
 should be punished
such
 as adult citizens and,
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hopefully
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 these specific
laws
 will be installed over the world and as a society do not forget that youngers are the future.
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