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Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Job dissatisfaction and inadequacy of cash often lead to
worst
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 physical and mental conditions. Hereby, it is to state that some people tend to search
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 career options if
that is
 not going properly as per their qualification whilst
other
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 choose to continue the same thing despite
of
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less payscale and insecurity. Both cases have different thoughts that are illustrated below. The need
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 fooding housing and basic things for
the
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survival often make people do various work in their life, be it
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worthwhile
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worth while
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 of their qualifications or not. They are compelled to provide services because of the shortage of employment as the population keep on rising. The
Times News
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 on
it's
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 annual news had shown population growth rate increment by 5% each year which makes it difficult to get nice work leading to poverty and hunger.
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, workers often face depression and vulnerability
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 mental illness.
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contrary
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,
other
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 person believes that improvements in
working
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the working
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 environment
such
 as increasing salary, wages,
also
 facilities motivate them which leads to better results and competency of
staffs
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, ultimately getting more satisfaction, interest and
self esteem
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. According to the survey conducted by Worker's Union in the year 2018, having optimum facilities in
working
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 sector of
laborers
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labourers
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, the
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company's
companys
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 outcome surge by 40% than the previous year which shows that if payments
is
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 increased by annually people are more fascinated for working efficiently and effectively.
Therefore
, as there
is
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 different aspects and perspectives of
less
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 payments, getting more salary attracts person having their best efforts and
thus
 leading to better outcomes which
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 good for both the employer and employee.
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