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Some people believe that children under age 10 should be given their own interest subject, while others believe that should be given regular subjects. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #age #interest #subjects
I OBSTINATELY BELIEVE THAT CHILDEN WHO ARE UNDER 10 YEARS SHOULD NOT PICK THEIR OWN PREFERABLE
SUBJECT
. WHILE OTHERS ARGUE THAT
THIS
 PUPIL SHOULD LEARN MORE ABOUT REGULAR SUBJECTS.
THIS
 FORTHCOMING ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE A PERSONAL POINT OF VIEW.
TO BEGIN
 WITH, UNDERAGE CHILDREN ARE IMMATURE AND THEY DON'T HAVE MANY IDEAS OF CHOOSING
SUBJECT
. THEY MIGHT THINK WHICH BOOKS SEEMS EASIER THAT SHOULD BE THEIR PRIORITY.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IF
ONE
 BOY OR GIRL HAVE TO SOLVE MATHEMATICS AND
ON THE OTHER HAND
 HAVE TO READ A POETRY , DEFINITELY THAT CHILD SHOULD PREFER THE EASIEST
ONE
 .
FURTHERMORE
, IF THEY PULL
ONE
SUBJECT
 PARTICULARLY THEY MIGHT NOT EXPOSE TO THE OTHER SIDES AND THAT CAN AFFECT IN FUTURE LIFE. TO MITIGATE MORE ABOUT ANOTHER VIEWPOINT , PARENTS SHOULD TAKE THE CHARGE
FOR
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SUBJECT
 SELECTION AFTER A DISCUSSION WITH THEIR CHILDREN. THEY HAVE EXPERIENCE, KNOWLEDGE AND MOST IMPORTANTLY BRIGHT FUTURE PLANS FOR THEIR CHILD. YOUNGSTERS SHOULD LEARN A BROAD AREA TO GAIN MORE IDEAS TO SELECT A PARTICULAR
ONE
 IN THEIR UPCOMING LIFE. IF THEY DO NOT KNOW HOW CAN THEY CHOOSE
ONE
SUBJECT
 IN FUTURE. SO TO KNOW THEIR OWN INTEREST THEY SHOULD GET AN EXPOSURE. TO CONCLUDE WITH, EACH AND EVERY INDIVIDUAL HAS THEIR OWN INTEREST IN LIFE AND THEY MUST INVESTIGATE THAT .
THUS
 THERE IS A CERTAIN AGE FOR THAT DECISION AND UNDER TEN IS DEFINITELY NOT THAT NUMBER. I PERSONALLY THINK EACH
SUBJECT
 IS NEED TO BE EXPLORED TILL THEY IDENTIFY WHICH
ONE
 IS SUITABLE FOR THEM.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural curiosity
  • lifelong love of learning
  • specialized subjects
  • unique talents
  • independence
  • decision-making skills
  • traditional curriculum
  • well-rounded education
  • essential knowledge
  • foundational skills
  • personal development
  • informed choices
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