The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trends

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hospital
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between 2007 and 2010. Overall,
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staff car parking. In 2007, hospital Rd. embedded six
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hospital. All these
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hospital
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two independent parking. Staff parking area remained at the former location , while the public parking shifted to the right side of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • processed snacks
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • digital entertainment
  • balanced diet
  • junk food
  • diabetes
  • high blood pressure
  • heart diseases
  • low self-esteem
  • nutritious meal options
  • combat
  • educational programs
  • obesity
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