The environment is changing rapidly because humans are destroying nature to meet their needs. Discuss this cause of environmental change and suggest some solutions for this problem.
Ever since humans have existed, they are continuously jeopardizing the natural environment in their surroundings for their personal and selfish purposes regardless of how severe the consequences are. These actions have caused
many
irreversible Correct word choice
apply
damages
. Fix the agreement mistake
damage
Nevertheless
, there are some resolutions for them which this
passage will elaborate on.
Catastrophic affairs have caused many environmental issues like global warming and animal extinction
. To begin
with, the most destructive reason for global warming is the emission of greenhouse gasses particularly carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide which are discharged by burning fossil fuels for generating power, transportation, and even manufacturing goods in factories. In addition
, another result of nature
destruction is various animals ceasing to exist more and more every day. Change noun form
nature's
For instance
, pandas are one of the most endangered species that are on the verge of extinction
.
Measures should be taken into action so as to prevent nature from being ruined. In terms of what should be done to stop or mitigate global warming, the causes of this
disaster should be taken into consideration therefore
electric cars or hybrid cars should replace fossil fuel burning
cars and generating power should be done by using more sustainable energy Add a hyphen
fuel-burning
such
as wind or solar sources. Similarly
, animal preservation should be the first priority to prevent them from extinction
. Particularly, the prohibition of illegitimate hunt
down of rare species is one of the most efficient methods that come to mind. Replace the word
hunting
Furthermore
, garments made of animal skins or even worse other parts of their body should not be available in gift shops.
In conclusion, saving the earth from destruction is up to us humans thus
we should preserve the environment in our surroundings and prevent disasters like global warming and the extinction
of rare species.Submitted by kiakmn00 on
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The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the causes of environmental change and suggesting solutions. However, some points lack depth and could be further developed to enhance task achievement.
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