Society would benefit from a ban of all forms of advertising because,it serves no useful purpose,and can even be damaging.To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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types of advertising are spammed and the reason

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there is no advantage and it can even be damaging. I partly agree and disagree with

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mental health and

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are useful because recommending a good application and can develop

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become angry because there is no advantage of watching and there is an opportunity to appeal

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good content,so it can ruin mental health of

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who is not supposed having

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are useful and the reason is that they represent a really good and smart application in a short video,so it can save

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some of these,which is really educating,interesting and funny

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

400 words

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