Society would benefit from a ban of all forms of advertising because,it serves no useful purpose,and can even be damaging.To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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types of advertising are spammed and the reason
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there is no advantage and it can even be damaging. I partly agree and disagree with
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mental health and
advetisements
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advertisements
is almost
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useful
unuseful
,but some
advertisements
are useful because recommending a good application and can develop
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view of a child. Nowadays,there are many smart websites,apps,online programmes
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made for
children
in order to develop them despite their age. But,these days
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advertisements
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even on
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You Tube
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before starting the video,
as a result
,many
people
and
children
become angry because there is no advantage of watching and there is an opportunity to appeal
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with not
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good content,so it can ruin mental health of
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such
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side, some
advertisements
are useful and the reason is that they represent a really good and smart application in a short video,so it can save
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time
and just
downlload
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it for a short
time
without any
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.By downloading that
app
from an advertisement it may give 15,30,50 and
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of price-off and
this
is a good help for
children
,for teenagers if
this
app
is connected to their studies or for adults who downloaded one
app
with the purpose of making their work easier. Putting
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is quite famous as there are so many
people
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attention and with the aim of attracting more attention,most
people
put interesting and creative images or videos.
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, videos which stop the process of doing something is annoying,it is just
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.
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,one person wants to find an educative video for someone for a short
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advertisements
, so it is not comfortable to make another person
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wait for one certain thing. But, there are some videos which describe, shows an
app
without downloading
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and
gives an opportunity to use it for a short period of
time
,so
this
is a good idea to attract
people
and sometimes if
this
app
is entertaining,
as a result
,
compane
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companies
company
might get an income of downloading their
app
. By way of conclusion,some
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brain,
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some of these,which is really educating,interesting and funny
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good
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choice for all
people
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for a short
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • unnecessary expenditure
  • critical source
  • informed choices
  • misleading
  • exaggerate
  • survival
  • target audience
  • environmental degradation
  • disposal
  • art and expression
  • social and cultural value
  • commercial intent
  • reasoned conclusion
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