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People have mindsets about whether individuals to go straight into work and getting experience or getting a degree from university is the best way to enter a good job.

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People
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 have mindsets about whether humans to go straight into
work
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 and getting experience or getting a
degree
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 from
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university
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a university
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 is the best
way
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 to enter a good
job
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.    According to my opinion, taking a
degree
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 from
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university
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a university
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 is
more
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apply
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essential for us to enter a pretty
job
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.   On the one hand, to go straight into
work
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 is
difficult
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a difficult
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way
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 to my mind. Because
,
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people
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 without a
degree
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 cannot
work
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 at government offices.
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,  most
people
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 prefer to go straight into
work
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 even it is hard. The advantage of
this
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 method is that they do not spend
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long
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along
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a long
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 time and financial costs to get a
degree
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.   
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, having a
degree
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 demand us
be
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to be
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 rational and knowledgeable.
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, we taught
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work
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 hard and
doing
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 well in our lessons at
university
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. Certainly, before we take a
degree
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 from
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university
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a university
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 ,we must go to
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at
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a
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university
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. In my opinion, aspiring and working hard
people
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 choose
this
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way
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. I am a student so, I prefer
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taking
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take
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 a
degree
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.
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, it can be said that
,
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 to have a diploma is to have a well-paid
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. My goal is to make enough money to meet the needs of myself and my family in the future. For
this
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 reason, I approve
getting
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of getting
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 a
degree
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.    In conclusion, to go straight into
work
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 and getting experience may be
good
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a good
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way
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 for some
people
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finding
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the
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a
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 vital
job
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, but it seems to me that having a diploma has much more benefits in life.
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