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In some cities, the government has tried to reduce traffic by a congestion tax during rush hours. Is this positive or negative?

#cities #government #traffic #congestion #tax #rush #hours
To begin
 with, congestion tax fees would alleviate the traffic in the most crowded neighbourhoods in major cities and will have people take the public transport so as to commute to these areas
although
 some people have some urgent errands to run
thus
 they will pay the price to travel by their own cars, regardless.
Consequently
, air pollution in some significantly crowded vicinities will mitigate which will be accommodating for residents in the areas,
nevertheless
 the weather will be cleaner as less amount of fossil fuel is burnt. Be that as it may, by accumulating congestion taxes, the country and the municipality will be able to provide better accommodation and transportation services to stimulate people to use the public transport system more often. As an example of what the tax money of
this
 kind could build is more subway and bus stations will be built which will not only help with the quota of personal cars on the streets but will improve civilians’ lives and how less time of theirs will be wasted for commuting. In conclusion, not only will
this
 affair would help reduce the traffic,
therefore
, improving the weather circumstances but it would
also
 help with the governments’ budget to improve transportation facilities in major cities.
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