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The diagram illustrates the processing of
milk
 and the production of
dairy
 products for commercial sale. Overall, there are several processes for
milk
 production before going to the
dairy
 products at the
last
 process. Beginning with the milking machine is collected
milk
 from the cows. Meanwhile, they are distributed all of the
dairy
 products to the commercial stores at the final stage. In the
first
 stage, raw
milk
 will collect by a milking machine twice a day.
Next
, all of them will transfer to the refrigeration storage for keeping
milk
 at a cool temperature. After that, they have filled the
milk
 into a
milk
 tanker and deliver them to the
dairy
 by truck every day. The following process is that all of the
milk
 is kept in
dairy
 which can produce cheese, cream, and butter in
this
 stage. Another product from
dairy
 will be
milk
. They are transferred
milk
 to pasteurizing and packing them before distributing to the supermarkets and shops at the final process.
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