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In the past, many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is a tremendously controversial perspective heating a debate whether
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 the old days, male politicians have ruled our community to violence and conflicts;
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 having political
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 would make our
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 more peaceful. I consider myself an advocate of
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 notion. Without a shadow of a doubt, throughout history, male politicians are gravitated towards triggering a violent world. Given the fact that they are likely to give a wealth of aggressive policies and utilize violence-packed actions and weapons with a view to reaching their set goals
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 as seizing
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. Adolf Hitler who is a dictator of Germany can be cited as a remarkable example. With regard to his political career, He always offered an eclectic mix of hard
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 of commands which are the chief roots breeding
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World War 2
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 desired to expand Germany-his country. In summary, men getting the leading roles have a tendency to rule a brutal
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 the demerits of
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 leading the
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 are widely acknowledged, it is unfair if the merits of
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 in a driving seat are neglected. It is clear to say that
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 have the soft
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 of collaboration which is biased towards negotiation and persuasion to deal with dire and alarming issues in lieu of violent strategies of men.
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, Angela Markel who is the former prime minister of Germany makes a great contribution in settling the dispute between Ukraine and Russia. In conclusion, our
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 will be more tranquil and better governed as long as it is led by
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. All in all,
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 formulate non-violent ways and decide to stay out of war. At odds with, male politicians are partial towards putting forward harsh policies to run the community.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • male-dominated leadership
  • empathetic
  • cooperative
  • inclusive society
  • governance
  • diversity
  • sustainable peace
  • social welfare
  • collaborative approach
  • international relations
  • leadership qualities
  • decision-making processes
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