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the alteration of the happy valley shopping center between 1982 and 2012.

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The given maps illustrate the alteration of the
happy valley
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Happy Valley
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 shopping centre between 1982 and 2012.
Overall
. There were noticeable changes after the construction
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 place and the significant change can be seen in the addition of facilities. In 1982, the shopping centre was located on the eastern side, which was surrounded by trees, the lake was there towards the northwest, which is beside it there was a pathway leading to the entrance. The lobby area was right after the entrance, the entertainment area was there in the centre of the building, towards the north of which was the food
store
 and on the northwest corner, the coffee shop was there.
While
 towards the south there were four elevators and
the
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 toilet to the southwest. Towards to east, the sports
store
, the electric
store
 and
furniture
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the furniture
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store
 can be seen. Enormous changes have been seen after 30 years. The pathway was replaced by a large parking lot, the new furniture retail was constructed in the place of the lake.
Whereas
 the entertainment was certain in its place, the food
store
 and the coffee shop on the north
was
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 replaced by the relocated of sports
store
 and electronic
store
. The area of the shop on the west was divided into four, with situated on the south was
food
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a food
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store
 and
themed
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the themed
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 restaurant was there between two empty rooms.
Moreover
, the toilets and the elevators had no changes.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a more comprehensive coverage of the key features and changes in the map. Pay attention to the logical development of ideas and provide clear and specific examples to support the main points.
task response
The response does not fully address all key features and changes in the maps. Provide a more detailed and comprehensive analysis of the maps by including all significant changes. Carefully consider the task requirements and ensure a more complete response.

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