Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their family. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Children

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have much free time to do on their

age

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. It comes up with their

eagerment

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engagement

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to know every little

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things

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that suit them, especially when it comes to

have

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social

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connection,

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as playing with their

friends

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at the same

age

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.

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, parents should pay more attention to

children

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's activities so they can process what is good and what is bad for them. Some people believe that

children

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should have more time with their

family

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to minimize negative impacts that would hurt or

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for them. It believes their family can teach them good

things

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, so in the

future

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they will become someone with good manners and can make positive impacts

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the

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society.

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,

children

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at

age

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5 to 11 still do not know how to do some

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correctly so in

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case

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their family can help them to learn better by spending their free time with their

children

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.

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seems good, as a human,

children

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still have to spend with others. As a part of human

being

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,

children

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need to socialize with their

friends

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on

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their

age

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. Socializing can be helpful for them in the future when they have to work together with others.

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,

children

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that usually

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with their

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can build their communication ways and create social bonds between them.

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, they will have better sympathy in the future that help society to be better. Aside from

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, they

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can release their stress and it will lead to

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them happier. To conclude that,

altough

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although

children

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is a pure little thing that still

have

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learn so

much

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things

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by

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their family, they

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have to know what freedom is.

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by playing with their

friends

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at the same

age

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will not only help how they grow up

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but

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create their sympathy towards each

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.

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from

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that, they will learn how to work together and

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good communication ways.