Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their family. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Children
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have much free time to do on their
age
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. It comes up with their
eagerment
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engagement
agreement

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to know every little
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things
Change to a singular noun
thing

The singular quantifier every is followed by the plural noun things. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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that suit them, especially when it comes to
have
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having

The verb have may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.

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social
Add an article
a social

The noun phrase social connection seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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connection,
such
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as playing with their
friends
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at the same
age
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.
For instance
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, parents should pay more attention to
children
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's activities so they can process what is good and what is bad for them. Some people believe that
children
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should have more time with their
family
Fix the agreement mistake
families

It seems that family may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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to minimize negative impacts that would hurt or
bad
Add a missing verb
be bad

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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for them. It believes their family can teach them good
things
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, so in the
future
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,future

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase in the future. Consider adding a comma.

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they will become someone with good manners and can make positive impacts
to
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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society.
For example
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,
children
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at
age
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5 to 11 still do not know how to do some
things
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correctly so in
this
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case
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,case

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase in this case. Consider adding a comma.

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their family can help them to learn better by spending their free time with their
children
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.
Altough
Correct your spelling
Although

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this
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seems good, as a human,
children
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still have to spend with others. As a part of human
being
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beings

It seems that being may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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,
children
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also
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need to socialize with their
friends
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on
Change preposition
of

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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their
age
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. Socializing can be helpful for them in the future when they have to work together with others.
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,
children
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that usually
playing
Wrong verb form
play

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb playing. Consider changing it.

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with their
friends
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can build their communication ways and create social bonds between them.
Thus
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, they will have better sympathy in the future that help society to be better. Aside from
this
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, they
also
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can release their stress and it will lead to
make
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making

The verb make may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.

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them happier. To conclude that,
altough
Correct your spelling
although

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children
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

is a pure little thing that still
have
Change the verb form
has

The plural verb have does not appear to agree with the singular subject a pure little thing. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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learn so
much
Change the quantifier
many

It appears that the quantifier much does not fit with the countable noun things. Consider changing the quantifier or the noun.

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things
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by
Change preposition
from

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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their family, they
also
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have to know what freedom is.
For example
Linking Words

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by playing with their
friends
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at the same
age
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.
This
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will not only help how they grow up
,
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apply

The comma before the conjunction but also appears to be unnecessary. Consider removing it.

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but
also
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create their sympathy towards each
others
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other

The singular quantifier each is followed by the plural noun others. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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.
Besides
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from
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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that, they will learn how to work together and
making
Wrong verb form
make

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good communication ways.

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