Task 2 Some educationalists say a child should be taught to play a musical instrument. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, music is one of the important
thing
in most Change to a plural noun
things
humans
lives. And, of course, not a few people want to learn how to play musical Change noun form
humans'
human's
instruments
. So, to be honest, I am not totally agree
with that point.
Well, In my opinion, playing Change the verb form
do not totally agree
music
Replace the word
musical
instruments
can help children
to find their way. But, at first
, I think, parents should ask their child about what kind of musical instruments
do they prefer. And, secondly
, do they want it, do they want to teach to play instruments
. I suppose, there are a lot of good sides. For example
, one of them, play musical instruments
make children
creative, artistic, which in the future for sure can be one of their benefits.
Other hand
, there are Change the wording
Another hand
Other hands
also
some drawbacks. Not all of
Change preposition
apply
children
wants to teach it. Several of them hate it, cannot stand it. Else, we cannot skip that some Add an article
the children
of
Change preposition
apply
parents
compel their Add an article
the parents
child
to teach to play. And it may Fix the agreement mistake
children
be influence
in their life. Or, Change the verb form
be influenced
for instance
, there are children
who in time
obsessed with it. They cannot imagine their life without music. And it Add an article
a time
also
may be influence
in their mind. Quite a few do not have Change the verb form
be influenced
ability
for Add an article
the ability
this
, and cause of it they can suffer.
In conclusion, I want to say that, yes, children
should be taught, but if they want it. Because compulsion may be
lead to deplorable conditions.Correct your spelling
maybe
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