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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Due to
the
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advanced technology, schooling has become more accessible in the present. Some schools are providing online classes to
students
, which is a positive development because it is
cost efficient
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 and is more successful than
traditional
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the traditional
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classroom based
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classroom-based
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 way of teaching. There are several reasons why studying at home is inexpensive.
First
,
students
 do not need to travel to and from school
everyday
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. The money that
are
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 meant for transport can be spent
for
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 other expenses that are more important
such
 as
,
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 food, and clothing.
Second
, teachers will not be needed because most of the studying can be done at home.
For instance
, the less instructor in the building means the
less
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 people to pay for.
Thus
,
this
 will cut the cost of
education
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 budget.
In addition
, online classes see more success rates than
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classroom-based teaching because of the convenience it offers. Most people that are working part-time jobs while studying find it difficult to balance study and work. So with the help of technology,
students
 can
fulfill
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 their duties in school
on
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 their spare time or whenever they have the time to accomplish assignments.
That is
 why the role of online teaching is more inferior
than
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 the traditional way of learning. In conclusion, with the help of
internet
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 and the convenience it offers,
students
 are becoming more successful in balancing their work and study life. Resulting
to
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 increasing student success rates.
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