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Some people think parents should supervise their chil dren’s activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both view and your opinion

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Some
parents
 believe that
children
 must be free to experience life, while other
parents
 prefer to control their
children
's activities closely. In my opinion, if
children
 have the freedom to face different challenges they would grow into more self-supporting adults in near future.
Although
 close supervising
children
 seem beneficial, it could have some adverse effects on their personality. Generally,
parents
 prefer to take care of their
children
 exaggeratedly. They consider it as the best approach to support their
children
 and prevent them from dangerous situations. In
this
 way, not only do their
children
 become less experienced, compared to their peers, but
also
 they lose the opportunity to live a true life during their childhood and learn crucial soft skills
such
 as socializing, sympathy and compromise. Another side of the argument is
parents
 who accept the hardship of giving freedom to their
children
. In fact, they give the chance of living real life to their
children
 to explore the surrounded world. I think it is a tough decision to make and harder to conduct practically, but very constructive for their future. Sometimes, our society or other
parents
 may
also
 accuse them of not being responsible and careful
parents
, which is a hard situation to tolerate. Another point to consider is that
this
 group of
parents
 must always monitor their
children
 by keeping an adequate distance,
however
, the advantages of
this
 independence will form the personality of their
children
 for facing real challenges. In conclusion, I think the advantages of giving freedom to
children
 outweigh its drawbacks in a long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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