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Some people are happy to spend their whole lives in the same area. Other people prefer to live in many different areas. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some
people
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 are very happy and spend all life in the same area but some
people
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 move and go to another
place
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. I think it good for
people
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 to go to many places and check if they like it or not and
then
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 decide to live there with family. Living in the same city has many advantages and so many
people
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 like living in the same area. It is very easy to reach the
mother
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mother's
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 home for girls if marry a boy in the same town.
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, I live in Delhi and my mother's house is 10 minutes from my husband's house. So very easy for me to ask my mother
help
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for help
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 for
bringing
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to bring
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 up my children. So, I like living in Delhi because my family live there. On another side, it is
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 good to go to many different places to see which is a good
place
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 for the future. For ,example my husband works in many cities before coming to Canada and I bring my children to high school here. We living here for 2 years and like
this
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place
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also
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. Canada is better for the children's education so the future is more good here than
my
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in my
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 city, Delhi. In total, both options to living in the same
place
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 since a child or moving to another
place
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is
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are
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 both good but
people
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 must check what is best for the future of families like job, education and life before finalizing the final city.
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