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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

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Some
people
 think that teenagers need to work while they are students.
However
, other
people
 believe that young
people
 should not combine their education with a job. These two options are controversial ones. In my opinion, they both have disadvantages and advantages. I base my opinion on the following points.
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 one side, a working
student
 has many benefits.
First
 of all, a
person
 learns how to arrange
time
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 to be able to combine his
studding
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 and earning
money
. Personally, I think it is a very important benefit a
person
 can get from
this
.
Second
 of all, a
student
 learns how to save
money
 and keep his budget. A
person
 gains new experience and knowledge working with
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new
people
. He feels more independently and spends his or her
money
 more careful.
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 the other side, a
person
 can have not enough
time
 to meet his or her course requirements. Sometimes it may result in a failure on an exam and a waste of
money
 and
time
. From my everyday experience and
observation
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 some
people
 require more
time
 to study new materials and prepare for an exam. Others, at the same, can
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 understand new materials. So, my point is that a
person
 should decide for himself whether he will be able to combine his studding and his
working
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. Another important aspect of getting a job is that a
student
 most likely will have no
time
 for parties, movies and his friends. I think that he or she should understand
this
 fact. To summarize, I believe that a working experience will give a
student
 more benefits in the future than it takes from him or her in the present.
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