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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

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Some
people
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 think that teenagers need to work while they are students.
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, other
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 believe that young
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 should not combine their education with a job. These two options are controversial ones. In my opinion, they both have disadvantages and advantages. I base my opinion on the following points.
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 one side, a working
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 has many benefits.
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 of all, a
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 learns how to arrange
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time
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 to be able to combine his
studding
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studying
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 and earning
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. Personally, I think it is a very important benefit a
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 can get from
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 of all, a
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 learns how to save
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 and keep his budget. A
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 gains new experience and knowledge working with
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new
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. He feels more independently and spends his or her
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 more careful.
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 the other side, a
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 can have not enough
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 to meet his or her course requirements. Sometimes it may result in a failure on an exam and a waste of
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 and
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. From my everyday experience and
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 some
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 require more
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 to study new materials and prepare for an exam. Others, at the same, can
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 understand new materials. So, my point is that a
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 should decide for himself whether he will be able to combine his studding and his
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. Another important aspect of getting a job is that a
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 most likely will have no
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 for parties, movies and his friends. I think that he or she should understand
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 fact. To summarize, I believe that a working experience will give a
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 more benefits in the future than it takes from him or her in the present.
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