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Nowadays, more and more children are being brought up by single parents family. What are the cause of this? What effects can be seen as a result of this?

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modern society, a greater number of
children
 are growing up in their one-parent-absence families. There seem to be two reasons involved to
this
 trend and it
consequently
 has
both
 positive and negative impacts on the development of
children
. These issues will be discussed in the following paragraphs. The foremost reason includes the marriages ending in divorce. After experiencing a plethora of difficulties in married lifestyle,
parents
 give a decision of getting divorced. That leads to the
seperation
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separation
 of
children
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 their fathers or mothers and the start of living in single-parent households. Another cause that should be considered is the choice of
parents
. In
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modern society, due to the standard of
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 family of two happily
marriaged
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married
marriage
 being shifted, young adults decide to have a child without getting married and raise the child
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 their own. These single
parents
 believe that they are able to
upbring
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bring
up bring
 a child with their viable abilities in
both
 financial and emotional perspectives without the dependence on somebody or society. In terms of effects,
this
 trend has
benificial
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beneficial
 and detrimental impacts on the balanced
developement
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development
 of
children
. About characteristic traits, it finds
children
 being brought up in single-parent families more mature, independent and realistic than their peers who experience
pleasurely
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pleasantly
pleasure
 a family with
parents
. The
children
 are in need of developing these qualities to overcome obstacles in life when the appearance of other
parent
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 is absent. When
children
 are deprived of the affection of
both
 father and mother, they might suffer great adverse effects on their psychology as well. The kids living only with
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mother
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 or fathers are prone to be in feelings of loneliness and
vulnerabilities
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. In some cases, they are bullied by friends at school and that can lead them to the path of antisocial behaviours. In conclusion, failure at marriages ending with divorce and choices of being single-
parents
 cause the circumstances of more
children
 growing up in families with the absence of one parent.
This
 could play a crucial role in
children
's maturity process in
both
 positive and negative ways.
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