IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

People today can use the Internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The
Internet
Use synonyms
 is the modern generation of technology
which
Correct pronoun usage
that
show examples
 has been used throughout the world globally since it was born in 1990. Nowadays, people can use the
Internet
Use synonyms
 to search for information, look up
some
Correct determiner usage
the
show examples
 latest stories, and find various news.
Moreover
Linking Words
, they can use to learn about lives, cultures, and religions in other countries.
However
Linking Words
, will people always stay connected without travelling in the future?
This
Linking Words
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of staying connected with global societies via the
Internet
Use synonyms
. Staying
connect
Wrong verb form
connected
show examples
the
Change preposition
to the
show examples
 globe using the
Internet
Use synonyms
 is technically simple for impatient tourists.
For instance
Linking Words
,
instead
Linking Words
 of booking their trips, they can explore 3D tourist attractions using the
Internet
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, they do not have to spend more money on going somewhere else.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the
Internet
Use synonyms
 requires some equipment to link with places,
such
Linking Words
 as enough wireless fidelity and systems.
Besides
Linking Words
, it resists voyagers' dreams, because they really want to touch the heart of famous attractions.
Moreover
Linking Words
, inhabiting to connect via the
Internet
Use synonyms
 makes the development of exchanging lifestyles lose their ability. The reason is that they cannot join together
in particular
Linking Words
 ways which get less hope of meeting their opportunity. To summarize, there are a lot of decisions to determine whether people want to travel.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
, in my opinion, travelling to see the world can be more exciting to learn than using the
Internet
Use synonyms
.
As a result
Linking Words
, it is better to travel at
anytime
Replace the word
any time
show examples
 and anywhere. Without travelling, the world will
might
Remove a modal verb
apply
show examples
lose the exchange of their influence, community, and international wisdom.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: