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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantags.

#computers #education #disadvantags
Technology has brought our world to our fingertips. It is undeniable that
education
 must adapt to the current technology ecosystem.
Therefore
, the use of computers has been increasing over the past decade. The following essay shall elaborate on both benefits and drawbacks of using the
computer
 in
education
.
To begin
 with,
computer
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the computer
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 has made
itself
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 as
number-two
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 must-have
gadgets
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between
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 every student, according to the survey by The Economist in 2022. Revealed by most of
participants
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the participants
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,
computer
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the computer
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 has helped them do some school projects effectively and efficiently.
For instance
, they can discuss anywhere and anytime by
online
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the online
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 meeting.
Moreover
, some software applications exercise the ease of producing essays, designs, and presentations. Resulting to
this
, it scales up students’
grade
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 which
needed
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 for getting into tertiary
education
.
Besides
, there is a new challenge
resulted
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by
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 the
existance
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existence
 of
computer
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 IN
EDUCATION
 aspect. The ease of doing
a
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homework and project by
computer
 has triggered students to do cheating.
For instance
, they can instantly surf the internet browser, copy-paste someone’s opinion,
then
 admit it as theirs. To be completely upfront, it is commonly seen in
last
-year students while doing their final paper, according to
survey
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 from The Guadian in 2021. In the long run, not only does it decline students’ creative thinking ability, but it
also
 negatively influences the integrity every student
must have
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. To be concluded, there will always be two sides
of
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 the same coin. I suppose the awareness of the positive and negative impacts of
computer
-based
education
 should be voiced out by the ministry of
education
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • online collaboration
  • multimedia resources
  • virtual classrooms
  • cybersecurity
  • pedagogy
  • remote learning
  • adaptive technology
  • educational inequality
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