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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The number of employees working at a
company
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 for their whole working life reduces. Some
people
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 tend to believe that
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 is a good thing while others think that it remains the better choice to
work
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 for only one employer. Underneath shall I discuss both views and form an opinion on
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 matter.
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, I think that it is better to change your position once every few years.
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 is because it will take you out of your comfort zone and daily routine. By doing
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, you will
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 meet new
people
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 and learn new skills.
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, you will become better at your job at every
company
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 you apply for.
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 goes usually hand-in-hand with a
raise
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 in your salary.
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, there are
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people
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 who leave their
company
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 to
work
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 for some other companies to become more experienced. After a certain amount of time, they return to their workplace to bring that
company
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 to a higher level.
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, if you
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 in a family business, you can not become a director of the
company
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 without any experience. Mostly, the children of the owner will
work
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 at another place till the moment their father or mother wants to hand the
company
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 over to the
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 generation. At that moment, they return to the family business to take over the lead.
On the other hand
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, an employee has always the right to decide if they want to
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 at one firm for their whole working life. Sometimes someone likes a job to a certain extent that they never want to do something else. That group of
people
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also
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 needs to be respected. In conclusion, there can be stated that you learn more skills if you
work
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 for different organisations even if you leave for just a few years.
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, some
people
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 are loyal to their current employer. If
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 the case they have to be respected for their choice.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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