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Some people think that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicine intended for human use , while other argue that it is cruel to do that . Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #animals #medicine
Animal experimentation, as a part of
drug
 testing on
humans
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 is being done as an obligation with some group of people opposing
this
 notion considering the brutality on animal lives. Though the laboratory tests conducted on these living creatures can have a fruitful outcome in medical science and research, in my opinion, endangering their lives for human benefit would definitely account for cruelty on them. Primarily, these creatures have a greater resemblance to
human
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 race, taking into account the organ function, body secretions and similar
system
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 within.
Therefore
, they can be readily used for
drug
 trials as their response to dosage and side effects would more or less be similar to that in a man.
For instance
, a
drug
 named Dapsone was studied on the footpad of armadillo(rodent family), which was later discovered as an effective medicine against leprosy.
Thus
, the scientific researches have their
certainity
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certainty
 and better efficacy of any medication effectively
evoved
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evolved
 only from animal experiments.
On the other hand
, widespread rampant scientific methodology for new inventions can only pose a threat to their lives.
However
, these species themselves might experience some mutations at
genetic
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 or physical level which may harm their reproduction and
thus
endangering
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 their entire cycle in
ecosystem
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.
For instance
, the bullfrogs were generally used as
an
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experimental bait in laboratories for testing cardiac medicines but due to the illegal
usage
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 they are
in
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 the verge of endangerment. In my
oinion
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opinion
, proper breeding centres must be advocated for these animal breeds before any kind of testing
that is
 done on them, on
the
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top of that, a safe environment is essential to resuscitate the animals that can possibly survive after the
drug
 effects. To conclude
with
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, the experiments conducted on living creatures can be beneficial to
human
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humans
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 mostly in terms of the multiorgan system congruence for better and relatable results on mankind,
however
, to preserve the extinct of these living beings proper management with breeding centres and healthcare
team
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 can be made available.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Medical Advancements**: Progress in medical science through research and innovation.
  • **Efficacy**: The ability to produce a desired result or effect.
  • **Protocol**: Established procedures and guidelines.
  • **Cruelty**: Causes of suffering or pain deemed inhumane and unnecessary.
  • **Moral Responsibility**: The duty to behave ethically and considerately towards others.
  • **Synthetic Tissues**: Artificially created tissues used for research purposes.
  • **Viable Alternatives**: Practical and acceptable substitutes.
  • **Inhumane**: Lacking compassion and causing suffering.
  • **Stakeholders**: Individuals or groups with an interest or concern in a particular issue.
  • **Complex Biological Systems**: Intricate structures and functions of living organisms.
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