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Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are more successful. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

#people #individuals #money #society #scientists #teachers
It is argued that having a lot of
money
 is the most successful
life
, whereas
scientists
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 and
teachers’s
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lives
life
lifes
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 are the most. In my opinion, jobs which contribute to our
society
such
 as teachers and researchers are most valuable
life
 rather than making lots of
money
.
This
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this
 controversial issue and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. Those who argue in
favor
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 of wealth driven by lots of
money
 point out that
money
 can make our
life
 much healthier and happier. Some people claim that we can
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society
 with loads of
money
. To be specific, it is obvious that it can help the
neighborhood
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 who is suffering from
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poverty through the charity fund and at the same time a wide variety of companies develop
its
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 own entities and
society
 by investing
such
 as purchasing their products or stocks.
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money
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therefore
 is one of
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the motivation
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motivation
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of
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 developing
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society
 and it can be a successful
life
. It is clear fact that
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there are many advantages with
the
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money
 in our
life
 and the power
money
 has is tremendous.
However
,
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money
 can not make solve all the problems we have. Frankly speaking, is it agreeable that the rich person who lost his/her health has a successful
life
? Needless to say,
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money
 is the most important factor in modern
society
, the successful person who leads the
society
 and country can be found easily around us and those are admirable and respectable
such
 as the scientists, teachers and etc.
Although
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money
 is
a
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one of
worthwhile
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 considerations when we mention a successful
life
, it
unfortunately
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 can not be a major reason
in
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 social development. According to the aforementioned arguments above, one can reach a conclusion that scientists and teachers’
endeavor
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 to make our
life
 more fruitful and prosperous is much more successful than individual’s wealth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial prosperity
  • capitalizing
  • luxury travel
  • exclusive experiences
  • contributions to society
  • humanitarian workers
  • lasting impact
  • highly subjective
  • cultural, societal, and personal values
  • comfort and security
  • deeper personal satisfaction
  • holistic understanding
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