Some people think children’s spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The table shows the opening date, the length of the route and the
number
of commuters per year of the underground railway systems in six different cities. They are ordered from the oldest to the newest. In general, the older the railway system is the more kilometres of
route
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the route
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it has. The only exception is Kyoto's which was built earlier than Los Angeles' but its length is less than a half of the latter's,
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makes the underground Railway system of Kyoto the shortest one.
On the other hand
, London's subway is the longest by far, almost doubling Paris', which is the
second
in length. The subways with the higher
number
of passengers per year are in the cities of London, Paris and Tokyo. The rest of the undergrounds have a
substancially
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substantially
smaller
number
of annual commuters. Even
suming
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summing
up the passengers of them all the figure is smaller than the
number
of commuters of Paris.
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  • cognitive development
  • educational opportunities
  • technical skills
  • digital future
  • cultural exposure
  • screen time
  • physical health
  • obesity
  • eye strain
  • violent content
  • inappropriate content
  • parental supervision
  • setting boundaries
  • behavioral impact
  • mental health
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