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the possess of sugar production. It is clear that there are numerous steps in process from harvesting sugarcanes to the final sugar product.

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The given diagram illustrates the possession of
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 production. It is clear that there are numerous steps in the process from harvesting sugarcanes to the final
sugar
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 product. Overall, it can be seen that producing
sugar
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 is a long and tedious process involving many processes. In the
first
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 step,
sugar
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 cane from topical regions are harvested and
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 they are pressed by a crusher to collect juices.
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, these juices are filtered into raw
sugar
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 and collected. Following
this
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, the raw
sugar
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 is transported to Germany.
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 after they arrived in the factory,they are purified by melting and filtering again.
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,
sugar
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 syrups are made.
Then
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, the
sugar
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 syrups are crystallized for
sugar
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 crystals. After
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 step, these
sugar
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 crystals are dried for a while at high temperatures and turned into
sugar
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 products.
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, the
sugar
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 is packed and transported to a supermarket and restaurant for sales and use.
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