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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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According to the justice system , which has been practising for centuries , a
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 in a criminal case has not given the past criminal reports of offenders due to various reasons.
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 some lawyers try to change
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 ,
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 could give bad impressions to the
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 about the defendant as well as , it could lead to injustice due to the preoccupied mind of the
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 .
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 ,
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 writer is in complete disagreement to change
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 with , when we consider the
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 system in countries , it may contain different professionals and people in society.
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 , they are supposed to give their opinion on a very fair mind, by concerning evidence from both parties .
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 , if they knew about the
defender
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's past criminal reports, they can preoccupy their minds about the
defender
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 and
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 may lead to injustice .
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 , according to a report published by a famous psychiatrist in England , if someone has a bad impression of a particular person , it would be very difficult to change their mind even if the person is innocent . At the same time , if the
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 knew the past records of the
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 , the community would think about the gravity of the past criminals of the person and they may think about the past charges against him .
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 could lead to relate
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 present situation of the
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 to the past and,
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 he could receive injustice even though he is innocent on both occasions . In conclusion , even though some people are against not giving past records of a
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 to the
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 ,
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 has protected defenders' rights for decades and it is justifiable .
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 ,
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 writer is in complete agreement with the fact that the
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 should not reseved the past records of a
defender
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 before giving a decision about him.

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