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Some people think that governments should do more to make their citizens have a healthier diet. Others, however, believe that individuals should take responsibility for their own diet and health. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Recently,whether residents having a healthy
diet
 is the responsibility of themselves or
government
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 has sparked much debate.
This
 essay will discuss both opinions and provide my personal view.
For people
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People
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 who think that governments need to have more influence
in
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on
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 their
diet
,they believe that government can improve the standard of sanitation in
food
factory
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factories
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 and restaurants.In
this
 case,customers are able to enjoy more hygienic meals which contribute to their health when they eat out.
By contrast
,there
are
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great
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 number of opponents who disagree with the previous point.They firmly hold that individuals ought to be independent
to
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of
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 governments and make their own healthy
diet
.To be
specfic
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specific
,they are aware of the importance of health.During
food
 purchasing,they carefully select ingredients full of nutrients like chicken breast,broccoli and fresh fruit.
Conversely
,even if governments pay massive attention
on
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 restricting
food
,people who do not care about their physical well-being can still buy frozen
food
 or junk
food
 which contain much fat and little protein and vitamins. To sum up,people’s own awareness of
benificial
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beneficial
 eating
habit
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habits
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 plays a more significant role than government control in having a healthy
diet
.
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