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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans illustrate the significant changes in the landscape and the development that had taken place at
the
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Grange
park
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 between the first year in 1920 and today.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
Grange
park
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 retains the
basis
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 elements of flowers,
water
, seating and music, with the addition of
cafe
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 and a children’s play
area
 today. looking at the first plan of
Grange
park
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Park
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, it was opened in 1920.
This
area
 was between Arnold Avenue on the north
side
 and Eldon
street
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 on the south
side
. that there were
the
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entrances for the convenience of crossing in these two sections. There were
also
five seat
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 areas around
this
park
. Especially, The middle of
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park
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 had
the
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 wonderful fountain.
Moreover
, the stage for musicians was located
in
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 the west of the fountain, the pond for
water
 plants
yos
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was
 on the northeast
side
, and the glasshouse was on the southwest
side
. Other beautiful areas were the rose gardens near the seats. Today, there are many changes
of
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 facilities and beautiful
place
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places
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 in
Grange
park
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. The seats are changed
the
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 position that they surround
in
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all four sides of the big rose garden, which used to be a fountain in the past.
However
, the rose garden near the Amphitheater for concerts is
sill
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still
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on
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 the same position as in 1920, and another rose garden
area
in
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the northeast
side
 is renovated to be
cafe
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.
Moreover
, there are
also
the
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areas for teenagers and children
that
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they
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are Amphitheater for concerts and
children's
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 play
area
, which
are
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 used to be the stage for musicians and the pond for
water
 plants.
Additionally
, the glasshouse is changed to be the
water
 feature and the
park
 has
also
the
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 additional entrance underground car
park
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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